Wednesday, August 26, 2020

My lost lotto ticket- Narrative

 


“Ring, ring, Yes Julie what is it?” whispered Gabriella over the phone. 

“You have just won lotto!!” yelled Julie, her friend.

“Omg! I better get back to the Airport!” Muttered Gabriella.

This is the day when Gabriella won the lotto. When she told her parents they were all overjoyed with happiness. But when she got on a scooter to get back to the airport… it changed her life…


It all started when Gabriella got a phone call from her best friend telling her she won the lotto. She then got onto a scooter, Gabriella could feel the wind pushing against her face and she could see beautiful, white buildings with blue rooftops. She thought that Italy was the most beautiful place in the world. But all of this didn’t last for long. Out of nowhere a green and yellow taxi ran the red light forcing the scooter driver to avoid it but he didn’t see where he was going and he went BOOM! The man and Gabriella crashed into a Hotdogs stand. With all the commotion the lotto ticket flies away.



”BEEP, BEEP, BEEP” the next minute she knew it she was in a hospital bed with nurses surrounding her like a swarm of bees. She told them she needed to get back to the airport. But they told her she was paralyzed and she has forgotten how to walk. So then she started to look for her missing ticket around her bed. When she couldn’t find it she called her family and told them what had taken place. They were horrified. 

For the lotto ticket, it had recently flown to the United States of America and had even taken a picture with DONALD TRUMP! It was now on its way to Egypt to see the great and humongous pyramids.






While the ticket was having an awesome time, Gabriella wasn’t. The next few months went by in a flash, there was still no sign or trace of the ticket. Nonetheless, Gabi practised walking and then she finally got the hang of it. By the end of it, she had completely forgotten about the missing ticket. The next day she decided she would surprise her family. Because she hadn’t seen them in what felt like forever. She told the nurses that she wanted to go and they said she would be fine to leave but she would still need to be careful. Also, they told her to occasionally sit in her portable wheelchair to rest. Gabriella was overjoyed! So the next day she got on a plane and took off to Auckland, New Zealand.


 In the next hour, she reached the Auckland airport. She found a taxi and the driver took her to the destination. Meanwhile, the ticket had flown around the whole world! It was now flying back to NZ. Now Gabriella had reached her home and was carefully getting out of the cab. The girl collected her belongings and was trudging up to the front door when the lotto ticket had come out of nowhere and popped right in her jeans back pockets without her noticing.


 She rang the doorbell… And her dad answered it. When he saw his daughter he immediately gave her a gigantic hug! He screamed: “ HII GABRIELLA, are you ok? Do you need me to carry your bags?!” Gabriella responded with” Yes please, I am ok I just need to take a rest. The two walked inside and Gabriella’s mum also yelled; “OMG!! GABI! Are you ok?” Gabriella answered “Yes, I am still looking for my lost lotto ticket though. When I crashed I don’t know where it went!” Then her mum said “check your pockets see if it is in there.” so then Gabi checked her pockets and there it was, the missing ticket. Her family was filled with happiness. They had just won $50 million dollars! 


The family lived happily ever after with the $50 million. This changed her life. After this tragedy, She made sure to be careful whenever she was in the city. What would you have done with the $50 million?   






Have I:

Yes/No

  • Written an introduction with an interesting hook?

Yes

  • Described the setting and characters?

Yes

  • Included a variety of details like thoughts, feelings and the five senses?

Yes

  • Used a variety of words to link events?

Some

  • Written a resolution with an impactful closing?

Kind of

  • Used paragraphs

Yes

  • Used interesting and powerful vocabulary?

Some

  • Corrected most spelling, punctuation and grammar?

Yes

Two things I did well were… 

I used different types of detail and used my imagination for the winning ticket.

Something I can improve is… 

Using more powerful vocabulary.












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